Frath
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Post by Frath on Dec 15, 2021 11:33:07 GMT -8
Ship Class: Support Ship Role: Support Ship Length: 26.5 meters (A):3 (D):2 (O):2 (S): 3 Special gear: 5--Cloaking system, advanced weaponry, advanced maneuvering thrusters, and advanced targeting system. Description: These modifications include an armory that takes up two jointed sleeping quarters, advanced maneuvering thrusters, cloaking, and the weapons systems are engineered for more precision and power (about double). The Black Menace, a Star Courier, looks much like it's relative, the Sith Infiltrator.. Though it has many of the exterior similarities, the interior is shaped to better suit it's pilot, Frath. It's maneuverability can be improved, but it makes up for it in weapons and intimidation. It's appealing to the eye on the ground, but a fright when in flight. It's rapid fire and cloaking systems, along with its various missiles and charges, offer an impressive display of explosive superiority. Reasons for modifications: Increase firepower, become more efficient, and overwhelm/surprise unsuspecting enemies.
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Post by Zion Morviael [RETIRED] on Dec 16, 2021 17:17:00 GMT -8
Hi Frath, welcome to your first submission. Just a couple things to point out:
1. Just first up that advanced weaponry is not a special gear. Any weapons and such are all covered under your offensive points. So you don't need a special gear point for that. You can probably just up your offensive points with it. Also, while not necessary, a listing of what weapons you have equipped might be nice (again, totally optional)
2. To help keep things uniform and easy to read for everyone, the Databank does have a template. To help save you some time, I've precoded it for you, all you need to do is just edit it into your post:
Other than that, looks pretty good.
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